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Comic 59 - Page 58
19th Feb 2015, 11:47 AM
Page 58
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Author Notes:
Skweeee edit delete
Skweeee
Hello, hello!

I'll have another page in a couple of days.

Please let me know if this is too wordy.

I have drawn much inspiration from all those nuts who go on about the Annunaki. It's pure nonsense, but would make a great science fiction story.

Please leave any thoughts or ideas about this page. Thanks!
User comments:
cattservant edit delete reply
cattservant
This is going to be
a big dose for our heroine
to absorb!
Amalockh1 edit delete reply
Amalockh1
I wonder how she is going to process all this information...

Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Hey Amalockh1!

Well, Piper is a smart one. Add the fact that Lili just materialized out of nowhere, and that Piper can pretty much sense when someone is being truthful.
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Hi Cattsevant!

Yes, a lot to absorb and I'm only allowing a couple of pages for her to do it too.
QuietClayton edit delete reply
QuietClayton
Nice ....page...
I like the presentation and the coloring and...and...stuff!!
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
QuietClayton, thanks man!
Seabiscuit edit delete reply
Seabiscuit
I don't think it's too much! I enjoy such lovely world building as this, and you did an amazing job! That bit of family history, too! WoW!
I bet Piper wasn't expecting all this...:D

It's very beautiful, too, especially that last panel! Those reflections are gorgeous!
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Hi Seabiscuit! Thanks. In my first draft, this explanation was going to gobble up seven pages. I forced my self to whittle it down to a page and a bit.
chris-tar edit delete reply
chris-tar
I think it's a great story and a great montage.
I too have been influenced by all the strange internet accounts of aliens and lost civilizations.
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Thanks Chris-tar! Yeah, I've always thought these guys should be science fiction writers, instead of pushing this stuff as facts.
Stever edit delete reply
Stever
At this point an info dump is a good way of catching us up with the mythology. I really like the way you handled it with the page transitions as well.
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Ah, thanks Stever! This was my first attempt at exposition so I'm glad you liked it.
Matt Knab edit delete reply
Matt Knab
Story sounds awesome, and I love the illustrations/layout that go with it.

I'm thinking, though, that you might have broken up this page and last one across a few pages just to not be so overwhelming. Also, this page, the combination of font, font size, and font/balloon color make it rather difficult to read. I was able to zoom in and get it all, but just something to consider for the future.
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Hello Matt!

My first draft had this page's info spanning seven pages. My wife urged me to "sum it up." I accepted the risk of too much to fast and tried to mitigate it my being reasonably vague. I think you're right though. This is a pretty compressed brain dump. I'll try and revisit this stuff in bits and pieces.

I apologize for the poor choices I made with the fonts etc.. I take it for granted looking at my 32" monitor that everything is just fine. You have reminded me that I should really take that into consideration. Thank you Matt.

ProfEtheric edit delete reply
ProfEtheric
Oh my stars and garters... Skweeee, this is, and I say this with no hyperbole, one of the greatest mythologies I have EVER seen. It feels cosmic, yet personal. Take a bow, good sir. I am impressed.

And no, this wasn't too wordy by half. It was just wordy enough. Not hard to follow, and nicely presented.
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Hello Prof!!
Thanks so much my friend!! I admire your world building/character development of your comics. It leads me to suspect that you experience the same joy as I do when creating your own universe with it's own rules. To read how much you appreciate what I've made is a HUGE boost for my morale. Thank you.
DizzasterJuice edit delete reply
DizzasterJuice
Skweeee, you're really that guy from the History channel aren't you?
imageSeriously though, this is one of your best pages yet! Love it.
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
PFFFfffffffffsssstHahahahahahahaha! Dizz, you nailed it. Unfortunately I don't have the gorgeous hair!

Thanks man!
moizmad edit delete reply
moizmad
Too many KO's and you'll end up punchy like Ali and Frazier, doncha think?
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Hello Moe!!!
That reminds me. Have you seen "When We Were Kings"? You should do a Moizmetre review. It's in my top five documentaries.
Ninabird edit delete reply
Ninabird
Don't think it's too wordy at all. Really nice balance of visual interest, actually. The font is a bit small though. Might just be my monitor.
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Ninabird! Hello, and thank you!

It's not your monitor or you. I selected too small of a fontsize. You're not the only one to mention it, so it's definitely my fault. Sorry.
Miaubol edit delete reply
Miaubol
Wow, just wow :D

No, not too wordy for me, and not any feel of info-dump either. Actually, when I reached the end of the page I just wanted to go on and read more. And it's so beautifully drawn too. You master the "world exposition challenge" wonderfully.

I. must. know. more.
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Miaubol, thanks. I'm glad you liked it. There will be a little bit more info on the following page, and then it will be the end of Part II of Piper's Song.
Spelledeg edit delete reply
Spelledeg
Oh wow! Skweeee this page is beautiful! :D The layout is really nice and leads the eye around and wow, that mythos is excellent.

Seeing the danger that Lili mentioned previously, I think Be'awa is going to be a problem...between that and that frequency thing. (Unless they're directly tied somehow, hmm)

But wow, Skweeee this is gorgeous.
(This has been my face this whole time looking at this)
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Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Hi Spelledeg!!
Reading compliments about my world building from one of my world building buddies on CF, is awesome. I'm very glad you like it. My guess is that you too, are familiar with the joys of just sitting back and figuring how everything is going to fit together. Sometimes I'll look forward to going to bed just so I can lay back and think about this stuff uninterrupted.
Oh and your self portrait, that's the reaction I was looking for!!
Centcomm edit delete reply
Centcomm
very nice page! Nicely done with the Kos.. wish the page was a bit bigger .. >_< SUPER good with the info dump and the art :D
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Thank you Centcomm!! Yeah I apologize for the small font. I wont be doing that size again.
randomNPC edit delete reply
randomNPC
That last panel is beautiful! *_*

Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Thank you very much RandomNPC!
Sleeper edit delete reply
Sleeper
Gorgeous page! Love all the back story here. And you had a great transition into it. That's important.

Though, you might want to check that last text box for typos (x2)
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Thanks friend! Yeah, transitions are hard. Way harder than I would have thought.

I found *roaming*, but I am having trouble seeing the second one. (probably because of the overly small font I used)
Sleeper edit delete reply
Sleeper
You struck a really good balance here. A lesser writer might have started with this. You waited until we were involved.

Good job.

*Universe*
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Ah thanks man!
CACKLE.N.COMICS edit delete reply
CACKLE.N.COMICS
I agree with Xibalba... very cool... PLUS the History Channel dude is never wrong!
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Thanks!!!!
dougwarner59 edit delete reply
dougwarner59
flawless page layout.
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Hi Doug!

Wow! Thanks very much. I appreciate that.
sephirencomics edit delete reply
sephirencomics
Amazing page!!
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Hi, Sephirencomics! Thank you very much!!
MistakeNPotatoes edit delete reply
MistakeNPotatoes
Well look at that - we're both doing an exposition dump at the same time.

Uh... except yours is full of color, and whizbang, and good art. This is a really cool page! I especially love the last panel, that's a real good overhead shot, but you're always been super amazing at those!
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Hello, MistakeNPotatoes!

Thank you very much. I was actually dreading doing this page and the following one. It was hard to gauge how much, how brief, what picture goes with the dialoge...

The nice thing about exposition, is that it will give me a bit more flexibility in the telling of the story from here on in.
demcleod edit delete reply
demcleod
Wow, man. This page is gorgeous. So colorful. I didn't mind the heavy dialogue. We were in need of some exposition. ;-)
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Hey Dwayne!!!!

Thanks buddy!!! Yeah, hopefully this helps with clearing a few things up!!!
Twistedfro edit delete reply
Twistedfro
Hey Skweee...not too wordy at all....when you have a great story and art you don't mind the words...just makes me want to learn more. Great page. I'm all caught up now :-)
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Ahhhh! Twistedfro!!!!
I missed you! You've been with me since I started this comic last May, when you were one of the first few to subscribe to Piper's Song! Seeing your Avatar made me very happy.

Thank you very much!
Proxy170 edit delete reply
Proxy170
I don't think it's wordy at all, but the font does seem a bit tiny! Or maybe just the spacing between lines makes it a bit harder to read. But now I'm really curious to learn more! Great illustrations to go with the story.
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Hello Proxy!!!
Thanks very much!

Yep, I wont be using that size of font again!!
CACKLE.N.COMICS edit delete reply
CACKLE.N.COMICS
PLUS love the reflection of the moon
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Hey Cackle.n.comics!

That moon reflection turned out way better than I had imagined. Thank you.
IllustratorMan edit delete reply
IllustratorMan
Amazing page layout!

Quite a lot of info for this young girl to absorb. Wow.
Skweeee edit delete reply
Skweeee
Hi IllustratorMan!

Thank you. Perhaps too much info for a little kid to get their head around?